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Eugene Church · 09-09-2006, 05:56 PM

#1
Eugene Langston dazzled the Tycobbian Association in 2008. He piled up win after win, totaling 20 wins to be exact. He gassed 170 batters, walked 64 and settled the season with a 3.23 ERA. These numbers, paired with 17 quality starts and 2 shutouts made him a logical choice for Golden Arm Award
honors.

"settled the season" makes no sense to me.

"finished the season"..."completed the season"..."ended the season"...all would be preferred and make better sense.

#2
A good season has become great for Cold Creek Catamounts pitcher Ashlin MacGorry! A 19-6, 1.75 season has brought MacGorry the 2008 Ruthlandian Association Golden Arm Award. MacGorry had 23 quality starts in 28 games started with a 0.80 WHIP.

"1.75 ERA" would be better.

I would also say "a very good season".

#3
12-2 is not an acceptable year.
McPhail is having an acceptable year thus far. The 29-year-old has won 12 and lost 2, recorded 142 strikeouts and 40 bases on balls in 150.2 innings with a 3.17 ERA. Opponents have hit .258 against him.

We need to reword and make them generic..."So far this season, the 29-year old McPhail has won 12 and lost 2.

09-09-2006, 05:56 PM	#1 (permalink)
Eugene Church Hall Of Famer Join Date: Aug 2002 Posts: 16,945 Thanks: 92 Thanked 96x in 50 posts	News Story needs to be rephrased #1 Eugene Langston dazzled the Tycobbian Association in 2008. He piled up win after win, totaling 20 wins to be exact. He gassed 170 batters, walked 64 and settled the season with a 3.23 ERA. These numbers, paired with 17 quality starts and 2 shutouts made him a logical choice for Golden Arm Award honors. "settled the season" makes no sense to me. "finished the season"..."completed the season"..."ended the season"...all would be preferred and make better sense. #2 A good season has become great for Cold Creek Catamounts pitcher Ashlin MacGorry! A 19-6, 1.75 season has brought MacGorry the 2008 Ruthlandian Association Golden Arm Award. MacGorry had 23 quality starts in 28 games started with a 0.80 WHIP. "1.75 ERA" would be better. I would also say "a very good season". #3 12-2 is not an acceptable year. McPhail is having an acceptable year thus far. The 29-year-old has won 12 and lost 2, recorded 142 strikeouts and 40 bases on balls in 150.2 innings with a 3.17 ERA. Opponents have hit .258 against him. We need to reword and make them generic..."So far this season, the 29-year old McPhail has won 12 and lost 2. Last edited by Eugene Church; 09-09-2006 at 07:43 PM.