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Old 06-05-2009, 04:19 PM   #43 (permalink)
tysok
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Quote:
Originally Posted by Kelric View Post
into short center...
trouble for Sizemore...
but won't get it...
it falls in for a hit.

Should be 'but he won't get it...' IMO. Even better might be 'and he won't get...' since the trouble part is setting him up for failure and the next line only reinforces that. The word but makes it seem like he should have gotten it.
Fixed that one.
So it can fit with other objects that may come up around that object it needs to stay "but"... but it was certainly missing the "he".
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