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Originally Posted by jaxmagicman
May I be as bold to make this suggestion to move the red text to the end of the first paragraph. I like the way that reads.
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You, who hate cliffhangers, want me to tease you some more and THEN drop the hook at the end of the paragraph?
Good suggestion, though. It does read a little more dramatically that way. And thanks for all the great comments, everyone. I'm hard at work on future chapters (I write about two hours a day), so if I get far enough ahead I'll post a chapter in mid-week. Probably not the next chapter, but maybe after that.